Hi Mike, thank you for your invalualbe feedback which meant a lot to me.

I received similar comments from my email subscribers.

I loved the idea of writing like a lawyer. I used to work with patent attorneys who changed my patents by making them attractive to corporate buyers. They simplified so much that I couldn't even recognize my research details.

I will focus on on the abstraction method eliminating details and putting them towards the end as you suggest.

I added key points in my recent stories. I hope they help my readers.

https://medium.com/p/7f75831b1df

https://medium.com/illumination/make-your-lungs-healthier-proactively-73bc5031f366

https://medium.com/illumination/make-your-kidneys-healthier-via-lifestyle-choices-b9f38d6cc468